shadow
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Post by shadow on Jul 9, 2006 23:37:58 GMT -5
------------------------------------------------------------------------ Full name: shadow edward doko Alliance: intermedal (wild card) Rank: jedi Species: bat Age: 20 Sex: female Assignment/Location: is only to find the person she is to kill next. Born: 1/22/1990 Place of Birth: bat's home world Parents: Father ----> kono doko Mother ----> kada doko Education: top of class Marital Status: long bat wings. two light saber one green and one purpel. love stuff:taken but is haveing a hard time keeping up with her hubby. Background: when she was still younge she started her training.She soon learned that her old friends where off to other worlds other galexys even.So she desided to start fighting on wich ever side pays more.Her mother and father both died by jedi for some reason they said that her mother and father where part of the dark side.She then grow quite fond of hearing that form her teacher.She soon learnd more of the force and why they had to be killed. As of now she is runing around as a stripper/killer looking for the damm jedi that killed her only hope of liveing. Quote:'I stay in the shadows'
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Post by Binary the Great on Jul 10, 2006 0:30:38 GMT -5
Alright, first of all, try to keep in mind that the biography is out of character information. If your character doesn't know, that is fine; but the information should still be found in the biography. 'Marital status' refers to the character's love/sex life (IE: is she single, married, widowed, frequent participant of one-night-stands?). 'Quote' is just a request for something that typifies the character; it's purely optional.
Your biography is rather... Choppy. That is to say, there's little chronological order and I find it very confusing to read. It appears to me that your character masquerades as an entertainer for credits whle seeking a number of Jedi thought to be responsible for her parents' deaths (which she doesn't remember). Further, it seems she also kicks ass when paid to.
I'd reccomend sitting down and ironing out the chronology first, then we can look over the finer details.
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shadow
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Post by shadow on Jul 10, 2006 12:47:30 GMT -5
ok yea i understand thanks. and this is like my first time turning this person into a thing that would fit into this. so yea i'll work it out on a pice of paper tonight.
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Post by Binary the Great on Jul 10, 2006 19:53:32 GMT -5
Another thing you should know: we don't have humans. Simians, yes, but no humans.
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shadow
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Post by shadow on Jul 13, 2006 0:53:28 GMT -5
come on........i want to be unque (cant spell worth shit when i'm tired)
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Steedo
Padawan
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Post by Steedo on Jul 13, 2006 1:58:24 GMT -5
There are hundreds and hundreds of animal species you could be and still be unique.
No one has created a ferret or a bat, or a bear, much less more exotic animals like zebra(very good metaphorical value of uniqueness on a zebra), okapi, or koalas... Or anthropomorphise a Starwars animal. No one has made a nerf or gnrt... Even existing Starwars furry races like Gamoreans, shistivarnians, ithorians are wide open. But this is a Furry universe, so you will really need to play some kind of Furry to fit in the universe.
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shadow
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Post by shadow on Jul 13, 2006 18:17:37 GMT -5
ok hows that one? hope its good.
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