nime doko

[shadow]

Full name: nime kada doko
Alliance: intermedal (tends not to fight)
Rank: jedi
Species: bat
Age: 19
Sex: female
Assignment/Location: she does not take orders but she follows shadow around even when shadow dont know it.
Born: 1/22/1991
Place of Birth: bat's home world
Parents:
Father ----> kono doko
Mother ----> kada doko
Education: top of class
Marital Status: long bat wings. two light saber one green and one purpel.
love stuff:taken but is haveing a hard time keeping up with her hubby.
Background: when she was still younge she started her training.She soon learned that her old friends where off to other worlds other galexys even.So she desided to start fighting on wich ever side pays more.Her mother and father both died by jedi for some reason they said that her mother and father where part of the dark side.She then grow quite fond of hearing that form her teacher.She soon learnd more of the force and why they had to be killed. As of now she is runing around as a killer looking for the damm jedi that killed her only hope of liveing. nime keeps away from shadow to let her do as she wishes even if she is near.Shadow has no clue that nime is her sister.
Quote:'I'm like shadow but stronger.'

[Binary the Great]

Okay... *breaks out scalpul* Let's vivisect this one:

The field "Alliance" refers to whom they most closely work, be it Imperial or Rebel or Pastafarians or whatever. Prefering not to fight has nothing to do with it, save that it will help lead the character to certain, more pacifist allegiances.

Jedi is not a rank, it would be classified as an allegience. "Master" would be a rank, as would "Padawan" or "Knight" for this area.

In the "Assignment/Location" category, assignment typically applies to NR (Rebel)/Imperial characters only, though it can be used for any task being pursued by the character (IE: "Currently Tailing [character]"). Location happens to be their last known place, whether it's Nar Shaada, Tatooine, Coruscant, Yavin, Bespin Cloud City, whatever.

The date of birth is, for our purposes here, referenced from the Battle of Yavin (BBY/ABY). You should adjust accordingly to that. There is no '1991' here to reference.

You should give your place of birth a name, not just a generic title. Besides that, the various mamallian species are all over the galaxy. A bat could as easily come from Corellia as Nar Shaada.

Education is more in reference to where, not how well. Did your character attend the paxeum on Dantooine, graduate from the Stormtrooper Academy on Carida, attend the Naval Academy on Coruscant or Rathiel? That's what we're looking for there.

You've confused 'marital' and 'martial' with each other; marital refers to the love-life and relationships.

You should take care of these points before we go into the biographical history.